INSTRUCTIONS: Edit the following paragraphs for consistent point of view only. Using the first sentence as the basis for the point of view, change the rest of the paragraph to maintain a consistent point of view. Do not edit for any other kinds of changes. Over the years, I have loved riding motorcycles because of the sense of freedom that comes from riding them. When I was a youngster, you

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dreamed of having a motorcycle of your own. I decorated my room with posters of Marlon Brando, Steve McQueen, and Peter Fonda, all sitting on their motorcycles. I got my first motorcycle when you began riding your brother's Honda after he went into the service. Later, I bought a bigger Honda that you drove until I went into the service myself. Years later, as a junior in college, you bought my biggest Honda and drove it all the time. Unfortunately for me, I had an accident that stopped you from riding again for eighteen years. However, in March of 2007, you felt the longing to ride so strongly that I bought a 1992 Harley Sportster, and I am enjoying every minute you are on it.

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Over the years, I have loved riding motorcycles because of the sense of freedom that comes from riding them. When I was a youngster, I dreamed of having a motorcycle of my own. I decorated my room with posters of Marlon Brando, Steve McQueen, and Peter Fonda, all sitting on their motorcycles. I got my first motorcycle when I began riding my brother's Honda after he went into the service. Later, I bought a bigger Honda that I drove until I went into the service myself. Years later, as a junior in college, I bought my biggest Honda and drove it all the time. Unfortunately for me, I had an accident that stopped me from riding again for eighteen years. However, in March of 2007, I felt the longing to ride so strongly that I bought a 1992 Harley Sportster, and I am enjoying every minute I am on it.