During his speech, Dilip used this sentence: "The lure of imaginary totality is momentarily frozen before the dialectic of desire hastens on within symbolic chains."

Question

Should we praise Dilip for his impressive command of language, or has he made a judgment error? Explain your answer in detail, citing relevant definitions and examples.
What will be an ideal response?

Answer 1

The best answers will include:
1. identification that Dilip has erred.
2. detailed explanation of Dilip's errors that mobilizes content from Learning Objective 10.2, including but not limited to:
• confusing pompous language with exceptional content. Outstanding answers may reference that this sentence could be considered a use of "empty words" (Learning Objective 10.3 Choose language that is lively and vivid, using appeals to the senses and figures of speech), as the sentence actually says very little for the amount of words it uses.
• not using concise, clear language that the audience could quickly comprehend.
• use of technical and unclear terms ("totality," "dialectic").
3. An outstanding answer might provide a similarly complex sentence and rewrite it to emphasize the differences between oral and written style, the use of complex versus concise language, and so on (using critical thinking skills to draw connections between Learning Objective 10.1 Understand the relationship between language and meaning, and Learning Objective 10.2 Choose language that is specific, concrete, precise, and clear).