INSTRUCTIONS: The following essay contains errors in parallelism, subject-verb agreement, verb usage, pronoun usage, and adjective and adverb forms. First read the entire essay, and then examine each item carefully. There are no correct items. Cross out the error, and write the correction above the word(s) you crossed out.[1]Every time people open up the newspaper or watch the news on TV, you are bombarded with images of people in handcuffs, houses on fire, and there are wars in other countries. [2]It seems like they enjoy writing about crime and broadcasting horrible events! In a culture like this, what can students do to feel fulfilled and happy? [3]One thing that would improve the lives of many students are the practice of positive thinking. [4]Positive thinking can give students

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more energy at home, improve their grades in school, and attitudes at work can be better.[5]After a long day a student may arrive home, look around, and feeling overwhelmed at the amount of cleaning or homework that needs to be done.  [6]Finding something positive can help a tired student to feel more energized quick. Instead of focusing on the mess, it's helpful to imagine the area already cleaned up.  [7]People then feeling the emotions that come from seeing the area clean and sparkling.  [8]Often, seeing the final picture helps even the most tiredest student to get started on a task.[9]Positive thinking can also greatly improves success in school.  [10]If students enter a class in math or writing and thinks, "I'm no good at this and never will be," they set themselves up for failure.  [11]On the other hand, if students think, "I can do this," he or she automatically relaxes.  [12]If a student remembers even one time they felt confidently in a math or a writing class, then they feel more hopeful about passing the class.  [13]Students who think positively become more open to the class material and start to believe that he or she can actually learn.  [14]They might even find themselves smiling in class and to start to help other students.[15]Finally, positive thinking can make a day or evening at work much more better. Even if the job isn't a pleasant one, the worker doesn't have to stay unhappy.  [16]Employees feel better and work more energetic even if they find one positive thing about their job.  [17]Perhaps they appreciate the regular hours, the ability to work indoors, or talking to coworkers.  [18]Most employees, if nothing else, is thankful to have a job and a paycheck.[19]Positive thinking doesn't come natural to everyone, and sometimes it takes a lot of effort to be finding something good in a bad situation.  [20]Most people in life want to be happy even more than being wealthy. Practicing positive thinking is definite one step towards a happier life.

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[1]Every time people open up the newspaper or watch the news on TV, you [they] are bombarded with images of people in handcuffs, houses on fire, and there are wars in other countries.  [2]It seems like they [journalists and reporters] enjoy writing about crime and broadcasting horrible events! In a culture like this, what can students do to feel fulfilled and happy?  [3]One thing that would improve the lives of many students are [is] the practice of positive thinking.  [4]Positive thinking can give students more energy at home, improve their grades in school, and attitudes at work can be better [improve their attitudes at work].

[5]After a long day a student may arrive home, look around, and feeling [feel] overwhelmed at the amount of cleaning or homework that needs to be done.  [6]Finding something positive can help a tired student to feel more energized quick [quickly]. Instead of focusing on the mess, it's helpful to imagine the area already cleaned up.  [7]People then feeling [feel] the emotions that come from seeing the area clean and sparkling.  [8]Often, seeing the final picture helps even the most tiredest [most tired] student to get started on a task.

[9]Positive thinking can also greatly improves [improve] success in school.  [10]If students enter a class in math or writing and thinks [think], "I'm no good at this and never will be," they set themselves up for failure.  [11]On the other hand, if students think, "I can do this," he or she [they] automatically relaxes [relax].  [12]If a student remembers students remember even one time they felt confidently [confident] in a math or a writing class, then they feel more hopeful about passing the class.  [13]Students who think positively become more open to the class material and start to believe that he or she [they] can actually learn.  [14]They might even find themselves smiling in class and to start to help other students [starting to help other students].

[15]Finally, positive thinking can make a day or evening at work much more better [better]. Even if the job isn't a pleasant one, the worker doesn't have to stay unhappy.  [16]Employees feel better and work more energetic [energetically] even if they find one positive thing about their job.  [17]Perhaps they appreciate the regular hours, the ability to work indoors, or talking to coworkers conversations with coworkers.  [18]Most employees, if nothing else, is [are] thankful to have a job and a paycheck.

[19]Positive thinking doesn't come natural [naturally] to everyone, and sometimes it takes a lot of effort to be finding find something good in a bad situation.  [20]Most people in life want to be happy even more than being wealthy [they want to be wealthy]. Practicing positive thinking is definite definitely one step towards a happier life.