INSTRUCTIONS: Edit the following paragraphs for consistent point of view only. Using the first sentence as the basis for the point of view, change the rest of the paragraph to maintain a consistent point of view. Do not edit for any other kinds of changes. Breaking my leg was an unpleasant experience for me. Initially the pain, not from the broken bone, but from the strained muscles and

Question

ligaments, was excruciating for you. People felt an intense discomfort for two to two and one-half weeks. Simple, ordinary maneuvers suddenly became difficult for you. For example, people found making a simple sandwich a major undertaking and taking a shower a major task. You found driving was possible; however, your physician advised you not to drive. Into the fourth week, you felt an unbearable yet inaccessible itching occurring below the cast. This was maddening. Finally, when the sixth week arrived, I had your leg x-rayed and the cast removed. Still, you needed some rehabilitation because my leg would not be back to normal for about three more months.

What will be an ideal response?

Answer 1

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Breaking my leg was an unpleasant experience for me. Initially the pain, not from the broken bone, but from the strained muscles and ligaments, was excruciating for me. I felt an intense discomfort for two to two and one-half weeks. Simple, ordinary maneuvers suddenly became difficult for me. For example, I found making a simple sandwich a major undertaking and taking a shower a major task. I found driving was possible; however, my physician advised me not to drive. Into the fourth week, I felt an unbearable yet inaccessible itching occurring below the cast. This was maddening. Finally, when the sixth week arrived, I had my leg x-rayed and the cast removed. Still, I needed some rehabilitation because my leg would not be back to normal for about three more months.