INSTRUCTIONS: Edit the following paragraphs for consistent point of view only. Using the first sentence as the basis for the point of view, change the rest of the paragraph to maintain a consistent point of view. Do not edit for any other kinds of changes. Being able to save money is a valuable skill for people to acquire. Young children can open accounts at banks and receive special incentives

Question

"just for kids." You have your own savings books and can watch my money grow. They can feel pride as they make interest, no matter how small. Once they get older, you find that they can purchase expensive items like bicycles, CD players, or even gym memberships without wiping out their savings account. In a few years, when they are ready to prepare for a career and attend college, I have money that will go toward tuition, books, and spending money. Instead of having to work full-time while I go to college, they are able to work part time or even not work at all while they are in college. Once the habit of saving money has become a part of their lives, college graduates find that saving money on a regular basis allows me to purchase a new car or even invest in stocks and bonds. If you make their investments wisely, they can watch their money grow even faster. Then, when they are hit with unexpected expenses, you are able to pull from their reserve in the bank, knowing that they will be able to replace that money with regular deposits into your savings accounts.

What will be an ideal response?

Answer 1

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Being able to save money is a valuable skill for people to acquire. Young children can open accounts at banks and receive special incentives "just for kids." They have their own savings books and can watch their money grow. They can feel pride as they make interest, no matter how small. Once they get older, they find that they can purchase expensive items like bicycles, CD players, or even gym memberships without wiping out their savings account. In a few years, when they are ready to prepare for a career and attend college, they have money that will go toward tuition, books, and spending money. Instead of having to work full-time while they go to college, they are able to work part time or even not work at all while they are in college. Once the habit of saving money has become a part of their lives, college graduates find that saving money on a regular basis allows them to purchase a new car or even invest in stocks and bonds. If they make their investments wisely, they can watch their money grow even faster. Then, when they are hit with unexpected expenses, they are able to pull from their reserve in the bank, knowing that they will be able to replace that money with regular deposits into their savings accounts.