INSTRUCTIONS: Revise the following paragraphs to eliminate sentence-structure errors. Louis Pasteur, a man dedicated to research, was successful because of his dedication to research and his faith in himself. He was born in 1822. A time before people knew about germs. Pasteur, however, believed that germs not only existed but that they were responsible for diseases. Even after a stroke that left an arm and leg partially paralyzed. Pasteur continued to work untiringly. At first, when he presented his theories. He was not taken seriously by the medical community, yet he persevered. Spending many hours in his laboratory. Until he developed a vaccine that he believed would kill the rabies germs. Joseph Meister, a nine-year-old child, was bitten fourteen times by a rabid dog, his

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parents knew he would die. So they asked Louis Pasteur to use the vaccine on him. Knowing this was the child's only hope, Louis Pasteur injected the child, saving his life. If Louis Pasteur had not worked so hard and believed in himself. Young Joseph would have died the world would not have a cure for rabies. Before his death in 1895, Pasteur became one of the most respected members of the scientific community for this as well as other discoveries. Discoveries that revolutionized the world's health standards.

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     Louis Pasteur, a man dedicated to research, was successful because of his dedication to research and his faith in himself. He was born in 1822, a time before people knew about germs. Pasteur, however, believed that germs not only existed but that they were responsible for diseases. Even after a stroke that left an arm and leg partially paralyzed, Pasteur continued to work untiringly. At first, when he presented his theories, he was not taken seriously by the medical community, yet he persevered. He spent many hours in his laboratory until he developed a vaccine that he believed would kill the rabies germs. Joseph Meister, a nine-year-old child, was bitten fourteen times by a rabid dog. His parents knew he would die, so they asked Louis Pasteur to use the vaccine on him. Knowing this was the child's only hope, Louis Pasteur injected the child, saving his life. If Louis Pasteur had not worked so hard and believed in himself, young Joseph would have died, and the world would not have a cure for rabies. Before his death in 1895, Pasteur became one of the most respected members of the scientific community for this as well as other discoveries. Discoveries that revolutionized the world's health standards.